divendres, 28 de març del 2008

The Secret of Oldstone Hall

In the cold afternoon in December. It’s very cold, and Pete and Nicky look for shelter in a B&B. Annie is the owner. She has got some dogs because she is single.

At midnight Nicky hears a noise. A man it’s in the house. Nicky see a book on the floor.

The next day tree mans go to house and says to Annie they want to buy the house.

Nicky reads the book and it says that there is a treasure. Pete, Annie and Nicky go under the ground and discover a gold knives, silver forks… but the men rob the treasure. Pete telephones police, and the dogs jump on the three men. The end is very happy!!!!!!

1 comentari:

Carme ha dit...

Hello girls! Here are some changes I would like you to make:
1) Start as: It is a .... (not 'In').
2)'A man it's in the house' is not correct. It should be: A man is in...
3)Nicky sees (with a final 's'!!!)
4) The plural of 'man' is 'men'
5) ... an say to Annie...(not 'says'. Remember the subject is plural: men)